HIM and The Crow

Ville Valo on the left and Brandon Lee on the right.
For a friend - she likes dark things and thus this monstrosity was born
I wasn't drunk while drawing this but the more I look at it the worse the letters and everything becomes..

Anyways I'm a noob at drawing faces, it started out so good but ended like so-so..
Still, it always looks better on the original xD
I wonder how does the image look on other monitors, I've always had these brightness problems on mine, I'm sure the results are quite different elsewhere..

Btw, sorry to everyone that still hasn't gotten a reply from me, I'm busy all the time and when I'm not working on things I'm just trying to get some energy back by sleeping
I hope you're all doing well.. If not then kick the life in the balls, it might help!

Oh yeah..
Not forcing you but if you feel like it then give me a CRITIC!! Make it like the world depends on it, tear this drawing apart, characters are my weakest point in drawing and everything you say might help me for the next time I get to draw them. Much appreciated!

Media:
-Pencils